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Roll of Honor Varnafindë
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Don't worry about it - it's easy to forget when you don't know until after you have posted that you are now on a new page ...

Should it be moved to your top post, or do we just leave it where it is at the second post?

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Oh, I think it is fine where it is now []

Okay, I am not sure of who could possibly be the young lady's ancestors. So I thought we might as well discuss a few possibilities here, Varna (as I guess it's mainly the two of us now anyway [] [] [] ).

So far, I've written 'and', so that if you want to add another adjective to 'great', you can. If you don't feel like it and that we manage to work out who the ancestors could actually be (how far in history, btw ?) then I can still amend my post. []

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I was worried we weren't supposed to discuss it - but perhaps the rules aren't quite as strict as that?
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nor may they collaborate with another on which words should be posted, either through MT or otherwise.
So perhaps a general discussion of some of the contents might be in order? []

Also, discussing grammar is in order, and I wonder if we've gotten ourselves into some small muddle, although it's probably more style than grammar - I'll look at it again later, as I haven't got the time just now.

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Well, I think you got it : it's not about discussing precise words that we're chosing, it's about trying to find a pattern to the story - not that it has been done in the past [] []

It's also more about my lacking of inspiration []

About the grammar - no problem, let me know if something's fishy, and I will amend my post []

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She suddenly broke the news that the intruder, who was also standing nonchanantly by a window, had told her that the only thing he knew about her heritage, was that she was not a real descendant of the original Elf-friends from Númenor. Indeed, her ancestors were only the extended family of the great and ancient
How is this additional information (in the incomplete sentence) a part of "the only thing he knew"?

It must be, as it is introduced with "indeed", thus referring to something the speaker already knows. It cannot be new information, as noone is introduced as giving such information, so it must be the intruder talking about what little he knows - perhaps explaining how he knows that she cannot be such a descendant?

(It has to be vague enough not to explain who she really is, otherwise it wouldn't be part of "the only thing he knew".)

And the intruder seems to imply that he doesn't know who she really is - so we will need another source for that. Either another person entering the scene, or some more written information, either something they have overlooked in what they've already read, or some new source of text.

Perhaps the intruder will be able to reveal something that he doesn't know about? I don't know how he would do that, and I don't think we should discuss any details about it. But other than that, we need something new, as this sentence cannot give the solution.

We should be careful about negatives now - every time we say that something is NOT whatever, we cut off one possibility and may have to introduce a new one. Which takes time.

Btw, when we finally conclude this (and finish with THE END), I think I'll ask WGW to lock the thread so that nobody would be tempted to extend it. The discussion thread should stay open, though.

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(It has to be vague enough not to explain who she really is, otherwise it wouldn't be part of "the only thing he knew".)
I think that sums it up quite nicely []

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We should be careful about negatives now - every time we say that something is NOT whatever, we cut off one possibility and may have to introduce a new one. Which takes time.
Okay, I'll try to be careful. []

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Btw, when we finally conclude this (and finish with THE END), I think I'll ask WGW to lock the thread so that nobody would be tempted to extend it. The discussion thread should stay open, though.
[]

Now I have to think of a new word... []

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And Telpy has joined us! []

I hope she stays for a while! And that Cernunnos continues to contribute as well.

It was never meant to be a story just between two people, although it has to be just that at times.

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I'm not entirely getting where this ongoing sentence is... going to. [] So I'm leaving it to you guys, maybe. I'll be ready for next sentence, though []
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I hope she stays for a while!
Just for a while? []
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A good long while *hugs*
Preferably permanently, but she has been known to come and go at times ;-)

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This current sentence seems to be a tad bit [] .
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...two rival elephants...
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Yes, this sentence makes my head spin. []
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Aim for a fullstop. []
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They tried to dominate the others, but they never succeeded. Makes for a good balance. Finally, the paragraph makes some sense. []
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Anyone for any ideas to continue the sentence? I posted last and cannot double-post, according to the rules of the story.
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So now we're ready to start on the next sentence and take it in whatever direction we want - only it should go towards giving more information, not just be rambling. []
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Since I finished the last sentence, I cannot start the next one, right?
Anyone for a try?

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The next word could be man or woman?
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It could - feel free to choose one or the other and post it!
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I have asked WGW to remove Numenorean Sword Trainer's post in A Short Tale, as he only post his own thing and doesn't even try to see what we're doing. Hopefully it will be gone before long - until then, just ignore it and post as usual around it.
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Perhaps you could try sending NST a PM to suggest editing his/her post?

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WGW has removed the post now (thank you!).

I think we should just wait and see if NST tries to come back, and then explain the object of the thread.
(It is made clear enough in the first post, if he/she had read it.)

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Sorry for not posting the link and the beginning of the paragraph in the first post of the page, I didn't notice that my post had started a new page []
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